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Post by Ipeitaki on Sept 17, 2015 4:27:51 GMT -6
Name: Fauste > Swiftpaw > Swiftfur Age: 46 moons Gender: Male Romantic/Sexual orientation: Panromantic Clan: CaveClan Rank: Warrior Physical description: A muscular black and white tom with blue eyes Personality: Swiftfur is a calm, laid-back tom. He isn't so easily discouraged less it be about the predators or about his brother. He is very loyal to his clan and would risk everything he is to protect his clan mates. Swiftfur is prone to fall into a deep melancholy though that often distracts him from his duties and would also cause him to space out at inappropriate times too. He isn't much a fighter while his muscular build, as he would rather talk out a situation than go claws and fangs flying. Swiftfur isn't always serious though when certain times call for it, as he wishes to keep the mood light even when it shouldn't be. A rather gentle giant he is. History or known relatives: Swiftfur had stumbled upon Caveclan territory when he was but eight moons old, going by the name of Fauste. He and his brother, Claude, had gone their separate ways when their parents had gone. Seeking shelter he stumbled upon Caveclan territory and was taken in to live alongside them. He was given the name Swiftpaw and learnt of the warrior code and how to survive in the harsh conditions in the clan. Swiftpaw had always been a rather calm minded apprentice, even as he tried to be as calm as he could around the occasional predators that popped up and walking along in the caves, avoiding awakening the bats. But he was not an exceptional fighter. It was tough on him though with fighting as he seemed to not desire any of it, and it would cause him to space out many times. However, over the many trials of training he had received his warrior name, Swiftfur. His life before Caveclan was a distant one. He lived with his Mother, Father, and his younger adopted brother, Claude. His parents were attacked by a red fox, and he and Claude fled. After that there was a fight between the brothers in which Claude attacked Fauste in a deep rage that in the end resulted in Claude leaving Fauste to fend for himself. Even as he was taken in by Caveclan, he wonders if his brother is alive and well. |
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Post by willow on Sept 17, 2015 4:38:43 GMT -6
Jay this is yours to accept.
I'd just like to remind you that we use a traditional naming guide here at Badlands Clans! Please refer to the link I have posted in the character bio template form.  |
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Post by Jay on Sept 17, 2015 4:39:27 GMT -6
I'm sorry, Murremist is not a name allowed in our naming system. We have a kind of strict system. A murre is not native to the setting, and -mist is not a suffix. Please refer to this for the rules related to naming characters. |
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Post by Ipeitaki on Sept 17, 2015 4:52:14 GMT -6
Ah! Sorry I was looking at the wrong naming list! I'll change it!
Is that better?
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Post by Jay on Sept 17, 2015 5:07:27 GMT -6
Almost! You're on the right track. Is he really a -cloud cat? He seems more suited to a suffix like -fur, if I'm honest. Remember that that isn't a lesser suffix. However, that's totally your call- I can definitely see where your chosen suffix came in.
Him being so prone to distraction would be a detriment to his Clan. It isn't something that would endear them to him- What slack does he pick up to make up for it? He can't fight and seems to avoid it, which is a problem in such a volatile environment as the Clans, where fighting can break out at any time.
However, I do like him! He seems a very nicely-thought out character, though perhaps with a little too much detail. I'm not sure where all those pure-blooded cats could come from, unless Claude and Faust traveled far from a town. The Badlands Clans have little to no contact with humans. They are very isolated, which is where their leniency towards loners and rogues comes from: with such isolation, new blood becomes almost a necessity.
To remind you: This setting is in South Dakota, in a national park. Humans would only be seen from a distance, if at all, and only rarely.
You are definitely on the right track, however! We just happen to be a little more strict than other sites tend to be.
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Post by Ipeitaki on Sept 17, 2015 5:16:00 GMT -6
It's alright about being strict I understand. It has been a while for me too with this. It's also pretty late at night and my brain isn't functioning well cause it's like 1 in the morning here.
But I can understand that sure! I'm fine with the fur suffix. Doesn't bother me at all. Sorry with so much slip ups too. Yeah I do get a little over board with my characters I think I invest too much time with their stories and all. I try not to do it too much. As for the breeds of his parents I do want to add in like more mixes as I did with his brother but I'm just a little confused on what breeds I could mix for them. I'd think it seem a little strange to just say that they are this specific breed and a mix of an other unknown breed. But I think I just wanted to give a basic kind of breed his parents were. I just didn't want it being too vague but I guess I also ended up making them pure bred on accident when they aren't DX
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Post by Jay on Sept 17, 2015 5:29:45 GMT -6
I understand! Latness can impair things...
And I just realized- Your prefix doesn't really fit! Your cat is black with white, and the native cranes are white with black. I'm probably not your favorite person right now.. Oops.
Clan names should tell you what they're like, without even knowing the cat: What they look like, and what their talents are. Asterflower would be a white cat, and they are very good at taking care of kits. Even without meeting Asterflower, you already know them a little!
You really do have the makings of a great cat here, but he does need a little tweaking. Name him for the majority of color on him, which is black. You could use a black and white bicolor prefix for him, too. Swift is a good one, maybe.
Thinking about your characters a lot isn't a bad thing at all. I know I do it a lot, too... In cat terms, I doubt they would know or care what a siamese cat is, let alone that they are one.
In my case, I'm definitely guilty of using pure-bred cats in here, where they're meant to be feral. My Wrenpaw is obviously abyssian, even though her bloodline is pure Clan. I think, really, it doesn't matter.. as long as you're not, I guess, too obvious about it? I don't call her abyssian. She's just a little brown cat.
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Post by Ipeitaki on Sept 17, 2015 5:36:58 GMT -6
Haha! Nah! You're still favorite with this don't worry. It's nice to get some help anyways when it's needed. I don't mind!
But yeah I guessed it would be too since I was having some trouble cause his fur was on a kind of line with me on black or dark gray and I didn't know which prefix to really use. I was a little confused and did spend a good half an hour wondering. I always thought the bicolor kind of prefix would be alright but I guess I got way too confused about it. As for the breeds maybe I should just make it more simple as him just being a black and white cat. But I should write down the breeds on my own time to keep me reminded and all.
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Post by Jay on Sept 17, 2015 5:49:19 GMT -6
Ehehe I'm glad I'm not being too annoying, then. Yeah, you can totally keep track of the breeds, but in the context of the Clans, it really doesn't matter and doesn't make much sense- but, to us people, it totally does!
By the way, I'm glad you're being a good sport about all my advice. <:
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Post by Ipeitaki on Sept 17, 2015 5:57:09 GMT -6
Not at all! Advice and some critique is always helpful and I appreciate it a lot. It takes a lot to make me upset or anything and this definitely won't bother me at all.
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Post by Jay on Sept 17, 2015 6:03:38 GMT -6
Looks like he's perfect now! Good job, Ipei! Welcome to Badlands! I'll move this to Accepted characters.
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